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Essay Question: Smartphones and the Internet
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>IELTS Essay Question：
Mobile (cell) phones and the Internet play an important role in the way people relate to one another socially. Is this a positive or negative development? What is your opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
>Outline: thesis--smartphones have advantages and disadvantages
起 Introduction: mobile phones+the Internet=smartphones: positive and negative
承 Body paragraph A: positive effects
转 Body paragraph B: negative effects
合 Conclusion: positive effects and negative effects of smartphones
>IELTS Example Answer by Jeenn Lee Hsieh:
The marriage of the Internet to mobile phones seems to have turned many people, including children, into what is called a "head-down generation" (in Chinese: ditouzu) of smartphones. For those who want to avoid the trouble of carrying a laptop, these gadgets are the best alternative for people to relate to one another socially. This information technology is certainly bringing such benefits as never before seen, but as well there are drawbacks that are too obvious to be ignored.
On the upside, cell phones with the label "Smart" have many technological benefits, when being linked to the Internet through software technology. Besides being the best way to communicate, most high-powered wirelesmartphones can be used as video recorders, radios, portable cameras and media players. No leimportant, these modern devices are useful in studies and business. Students can acceinternet on their mobiles phones while on the go, and thus they can obtain knowledge of any topic they wish to learn, anywhere and anytime. Likewise, the businepersons can stay updated with the ups-and-downs of the markets, and they can also keep in touch with their co-workers and clients 27/4. As a whole, smartphones play an important role in the modern world because they contribute positively to building social relationships and to better knowing what is happening around the world.
On the downside, despite being smart enough, smartphones as instruments for social interaction are apparently not able to help users become any smarter or healthier. Quite on the contrary, like co-ca-ine or opium, they get people addicted to them, which is absolutely an unhealthy effect. Very soon, adult users may fail to make a clear distinction between professional life and personal life. It is largely because online apps, such as Facebook, Twitter, Whatsapp or WeChat, take up a significant amount of users" time, not to mention frequent email checking and sometimes video games. What is more shocking is that even children are attracted to the usage of smartphones. It is feared that over-fixation may prove to be dangerous for the young people because it can affect their brain and lose focus on the studies. Generally speaking, smartphones these days keep getting smarter, but heavy users are becoming just the opposite.
In conclusion, although the advantages of smartphones appear to be too good to be true, their negative impact should not be neglected. Now that these powerful devices are here to stay, they will continue to be a necessary part of many people"s daily lives in the time to come. One thing is sure: many people of this generation and beyond will meet the future by constantly keeping their heads down, invariably with their eyes fixed on the mini-screens for the better part of the day. (Essay created by Jeenn Lee Hsieh ielts360toefl@www.chddh.com)
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>托福独立写作>TOEFL iBT independent writing task--
Use specific reasons and examples or details (based on your knowledge or experience) to answer your question.
>雅思大作文>IELTS writing task 2--
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge orexperience (to support your opinion).
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